Final Production Schedule

It is the near the end of the year! That means it is time for finals and final projects. In English 109H we have reached our final project, therefore, I am including my FINAL production schedule in this blog post. 

What	Where	Date	Resources	Completed	Changed
Reflection on Materials	Dorm	4/28/16	Word
Opening/Intro	Dorm	5/01/16	Word
Main Body (1)	Dorm	5/01/16	Word
Main Body (2)	Dorm	5/01/16	Word
Main Body (3)	Dorm	5/02/16	Word
Conclusion	Dorm	5/02/16	Word

Peer Review for Alec

In this blog post I will be giving Alec a form recommendation on his QRG regarding unpopular opinions. 

Review....

I decided to give Alec a form recommendation on his QRG because I already used that genre for project one and thought that I could help him avoid making the same mistakes that I made. 

I think that the advice I have Alec helped him to really reach all of the genre convention that are needed in a QRG. I didn't use the Student's Guide per say, but I used my personal experience as well as information that we went over in class to really help Alec. 

I really admired Alec's organization of his information. I thought that he did a great job of building up to his argument. 

Peer Review for Sienna

In this blog post I will be revising Sienna's standard college essay on the new barbie doll. 

Review

           I made a content recommendation to Sienna's essay. I thought that since this is the final production week it only made sense to offer her a content recommendation. I thought that I helped Sienna just finalize her project in order to make it fully finished.   

          Her essay was really strong and well-delvoped I just offered her some advice on adding some more quotes to further strengthen her argument. From the Student's Guide, I incorporated the information in the Use of Evidence sections. In that category it refers to quotations specifically, therefore, I recommended that Sienna add some. 

         I really admired Sienna's citations. I am going to be doing an essay for project four so it was really helpful to see her implement that genre before I attempt to. 

Reflection on Post Post Production Week

It is over! I finally finished my video essay and it feels like a weight has been removed from my chest. In this blog post I will really delve deep into the ups and downs of this week.  

What Went Down...

1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

The best part about this week's process work was probably the finalization of my project. I really had the time to go back and just fix all the little technical and content errors that were there. For example, I only briefly touched on a counterargument, but this week I had the time to go back and really explore and expand my counterargument.

2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

I think the biggest challenge during this week's process week was just my own personal patience and frustration. I am some what of a perfectionist, therefore, every little aspect had to sound clear and intelligent. Unfortunately, I have been sick for the past two weeks and so my voice sounds a little mannish. 

3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?

This is the final week of project three. We will now be starting project four. It is crazy that we are almost done with this course. It really flew by. 

4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

I am a little worried about this project overall at this point just because I really need a good grade on this project so that I can maintain my 'A' in the class. 

Editorial Report 13B

The last and final editorial report for project three. Woo. In this blog post I will go over any last minute or final changes that I made in order to complete my project. 

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added information regarding the total number of captivity deaths. I thought that by adding this information it better appealed to the emotional aspect of my argument. Instead of arguing that captivity kills, I gave actual numbers. This just helps to put the entire situation in perceptive an overall helps to more clearly communicate my argument.

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

Adding the information about the number of captivity deaths allowed me to incorporate this really awesome figure regarding orca deaths. I thought that this figure allowed my audience to understand the information in an organized manner. 

Selection From Rough Cut

Re-Edited Section  

Editorial Report 13A

In this blog post I will still be going over the editorial process for project three. Bare with me. 

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

When I re-edited it I added a counterargument. I had only briefly touched on the manner before, but after Tuesday's class period I went back and added a stronger counterargument. I think that by addressing and refuting the opposition's side I make my argument even stronger.  

 2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

The added counterargument section required me to add more pictures. I thought that the pictures regarding those that supported SeaWorld helped to visually present my content/argument in a better way. It at times can be hard to just listen and understand that is why it can be helpful to have visual aids. 

Selection From Rough Cut

Re-Edited Version 

Revised Post to Peer Reviewers

In the following blog post I will share some of my thoughts and feelings regarding the "fine cut" of my project. 

• Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know

The main argument that I am conducting is that a bad idea is horrible. I build up to my main argument by using background information in order to better support the main argument.

• Major issues or weaknesses in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses) 

A major issue or weakness always tends to be my genre/form. Every major project that we have done in this class I have lost points based on genre/form. Therefore, I would really like to excel in that area for this project. 

• Major virtues or strengths in the “Fine Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths) 

I thought that a major strength in the "Fine Cut" would be my interviews that I included. I thought that they are perfect for the arguments that I made. 

Fine Cut

Peer Review for Ben Meyer

In this blog post I will be offering some form recommendations to Ben's QRG regarding the new SAT.

PEER REVIEW 

• I chose to offer Ben some advice regarding the form of his QRG because I created a QRG for my first project so I thought that I could help offer him some advice so that he doesn't repeat the same mistakes that I did. 

• I think that I helped make Ben's QRG more visually appealing. I offered him advice regarding the font style and color, and recommended that he add a couple of more pictures. Hopefully, that will be enough to really finalize his QRG.

• I didn't use any materials from the Student's Guide, but rather I used my own personal experience as well as information that we discussed in class to help Ben. 

• I really admired Ben's organization. I could really tell that he did his research and had become some sort of an expert on the new SAT. 

Peer Review for Missy

In this blog post I am offering Missy a form recommendation to her essay about the recent controversy over 'black' Hermione in the popular series, Harry Potter. 

...Review... 

I chose to offer a form recommendation to Missy's rough draft. She has already created the project so it only made sense for me to offer her some advice regarding her current draft in order to be the most helpful. 

I offered Missy a title idea for her essay. She had the information and main conventions down, but she specifically asked for help with a clever title. I offered her a title, but it was just a shot in the dark. I told her that I hope it sparks some of her own creativity. 

I just worked with Missy's genre conventions. In class we went over the basic genre conventions for each well genre. I had them written down, and referenced them when I was reviewing her essay. 

I really admired Missy's organization. Her information was flowed really well, and her arguments were well supported. The standard english essay is my last genre to use and so it was helpful to see how Missy utilized the genre conventions so that I can learn from her for my next project. 

Reflection on Post Production

In this blog post I will explore all of the ups, downs, failures, and successes that occurred throughout the post-production week. 

What Went Down This Week... 

1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

During this week's process work I think that my main success was with the final production of my video essay. I was able to make some really great form changes to my video in an effort to really bring it all together. 

2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence. 

I think that my biggest challenge during this post-production week was the fact that I got strep throat on Sunday. I was really sick all week, and so it was hard to find the time not only to get better but to do this project as well. Unfortunately, I think that my illness set me back a littler farther than I would have liked. 

3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week? 

Based on my experiences this week, I think that next week will go much better just because I am not sick anymore. I have a lot more time this week to get my things together and work. I don't have a test this week for once and I am really excited to actually have time to do things. 

4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point? 

At this point I just want this all to end. It has been really stressful last couple of weeks and it will only get worse from here. That is why I am looking forward to turning this project in and hurling myself across the finish line. 

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

Hey peers! In this blog post I have explained some of my thoughts and feelings regarding my rough cut. 

Audience Question: What are you anticipating the post-production process to be like, based on what you accomplished during the production phase?

Based on the production phase, I expect the post-production phase to be mainly editorial. Meaning that most of it will be spent making tweaks and changes to the draft in order to get it to the "final" form. However, based on what I accomplished during the production phase I expect this phase to be another week of frustration. The production week just went. It didn't go particularly well or horribly it just simply happened. Therefore, there is a lot of work to be done in order to get my project to perfection.

Author Response

• I would like my peer reviewers to understand that this project is not 100% complete. I still have a lot of work to do before it is in it's final form
• I think that a major issue or weakness of my project would be the genre conventions. I am not sure if the conventions that I used are correct. I am also worried about the actual argument itself. I am not sure if it is as argumentative as it should be. 
• I think that the strength of my project lies in the context of it all. I think that the actual material that I am talking about is solid in the sense that I worked hard to gather this information. I spent a lot of time researching the information. I like the story, but it is a matter if it is enough of a public argument. 

Rough Cut

Editorial Report 12b

In this blog post I will be including bits of my project that I have changed/edited. 

Revision Process... 

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I actually added an entire section on PETA. I thought that I should give some background to show that people have been fighting for the orcas, but it just hasn't been as effective. This addition acts as a comparison between the California Coastal Commission's law and the lawsuit filed by PETA. 

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

In regards to form, the addition information made the video slightly longer and I added snippets of photos regarding PETA and the lawsuit. I think that this form alteration helps to present the information in a more effective manner because it gives more background information. It just helps the piece be more coherent. 

Rough Cut

Re-Edited Version 

Editorial Report 12a

In this blog post I will include a short section of my video as well as a snippet of the re-edited version in order to compare the two and visual my editorial process. 

Editorial Process 

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

In my re-edited version I decided to change the opening so that I included more of a personal experience in order to gain credibility with my audience. In the Rough Cut version I just simply opened with a description of Killer Whales. I think that the re-edited version better communicates my point more effectively because I was able to establish a connection with my audience.

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I think that the form in the re-edited version just flows a lot better than in the original cut. It is a lot more organized and there is a natural flow or transition. This form change helps to present the content more effectively in the sense that my audience has a clear transition between my introduction and the beginning of the body.

Rough Cut

Re-Edited Version 

Peer Review 11b

In this blog post I will be reviewing Julia's podcast regarding homelessness and drug abuse. 

Peer Review:

      For this peer review, I decided to make a resource recommendation regarding any tips, shortcuts, and tricks that I know of for creating a podcast. Julia chose a podcast for her genre and I thought that I could offer her some advice since I made a podcast for project two. 

      I thought that I helped Julia figure out the best method to create her podcast. I told her that GarageBand is a good resource, and gave her some advice on recording. I advised her to insert new tracks in order to avoid accidentally cutting out audio. I didn't use anything specific from the Student's Guide, however, I incorporated information that we went over in class and that I have written in my notes. 

     I admired Julia's precision in his production schedule. She wrote down dates that she was going to work on, but she also wrote down the time that she has set aside for doing her work, which I thought was a great idea. 

Peer Review 11a

In this blog post I am going to review Eren's video essay on Qatar's FIFA bid.

Peer Review Feedback:

     I choose to review Eren's outline. Specifically, I looked into the evidence/resources (sources) that were incorporated in the outline. I think that I helped Eren create a more detailed content outline so that when he goes to produce his project his information will be more clear and organized.
       Based on the Student's Guide, I helped Eren with his use of evidence and sources. I suggested that in terms of evidence that he include outside research or experience, while in terms of sources I suggested that he integrate some quotes.
      I really admired the amount of specific details that Eren had for his evidence. He really went into detail on exactly what he was going to be discussing. 

Production Report 11b

In this blog post I will share another snippet from my overall project. I am just giving a little taste of how production week is going on so far. Let's see what is crackin! 

-Content Outline-

-Adaptation of Outline Item-

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I chose to present my raw material in a video form. My genre for this project is a video, therefore, it is easier for me to share a snippet of my work so far.

2. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

I would say that the production of this material is mediocre. It is definitely a rough draft. In fact it is a very rough draft. It needs improvement, but it is a start. It was hard organizing all of my information together and just getting it to flow smoothly. I am still working out the kinks, but I would say that I am heading in the right direction. 

Production Report 11a

Oh Man! It is already production week! In this blog post I will be including a little snippet of my work so far...

Content Outline:-

Opening Section/Introduction

o   Introduce who I am

o   Upbeat Music (grab attention)

o   Title of video (grab attention)

o   Brief summary: A very brief recap of information regarding why the captivity of orcas or killer whales is unethical, and why it has caught the public's attention. 

-Link to Adaptation of Outline Item-

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I chose to post a snippet of the introduction of my video essay. The genre that I have chosen to work in, video essay, is as it sounds a video. Therefore, I had to follow the proper genre conventions and post a snippet of my video.

2. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

The production of this raw material was a little rough. I have never created a video essay before so I really had to learn all of the conventions and how to use the technology. Creating the little snippets of video is actually helpful in familiarizing myself with the material before I go to create a full draft of my work. 

Peer Review For Diego

In this blog post I will be peer-reviewing Diego's production schedule in order to help him create a better podcast for project 3. 

Production Schedule

      For this peer review, I decided to make a resource recommendation regarding any tips, shortcuts, and tricks that I know of for creating a podcast. Diego chose a podcast for his genre and I thought that I could offer him some advice since I made a podcast for project two. 

      I thought that I helped Diego figure out the best method to create his podcast. I told him that GarageBand is a good resource, and gave him so advice on recording. I didn't use anything specific from the Student's Guide, however, I incorporated information that we went over in class and that I have written in my notes. 

     I admired Diego's precision in his production schedule. He wrote down dates that he was going to work on, but he also wrote down the time that he has set aside for doing his work, which I thought was a great idea. 

Peer Review For Avalon

In this blog post I will review Avalon's work for this upcoming project. I will hopefully offer her some advice that will help to steer her in the right direction. 

Outlining Suggestion for Avalon:

        I choose to review Avalon's outline. Specifically, I looked into the evidence/resources (sources) that were incorporated in the outline. I think that I helped Avalon create a more detailed content outline so that when she goes to produce her project her information will be more clear and organized.
       Based on the Student's Guide, I helped Avalon with her use of evidence and sources. I suggested that in terms of evidence that she include outside research or experience, while in terms of sources I suggested that she integrate some quotes.
      I really admired Avalon's specificity. Instead of just saying analyze or explain, she really went into detail about the specific information that she will be discussing. 

Reflection on Project 3 Pre-Production

In this blog post I will try to sort out my feelings regarding pre-production week. 

Feelings?

1. What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

I would say that the main aspect that went right during this week's process work was the fact that I found a topic that I am genuinely interested in. I am more excited to do this project because I actually enjoy the subject matter.

2. What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

The main challenge of this week was the work load. I felt like I had way more work than necessary for a pre-production week. I spent most of my time analyzing the rhetorical strategies of random videos rather than using that time to actually figure out a way to create the vision I have in my head of this project. 

3. How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?

Based off this week's experiences I am bracing myself for the following week. I really think that during production week there should be NO blogs posts so that the students can focus on the production of the project, and not on the blog posts.

4. How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

At this point I am excited to do the project since I am interested in the topic, however, I am stressing about my time management skills as well as my technology skills.

Production Schedule

In this blog post I will explain how I plan to manage my time in order to get everything done in a organized and timely manner.

What	Where	Date	Resources	Completed	Changed
Opening/Intro	Dorm	4/4/16	iMovie
Main Body (1)	Dorm	4/6/16	iMovie
Main Body (2)	Dorm	4/6/16	iMovie
Main Body (3)	Dorm	4/6/16	iMovie
Effects (interview snippets, music)	Dorm	4/9/16	iMovie
Conclusion	Dorm	4/9/16	iMovie

Content Outline

In this blog post I will outline the information for the public argument project. 

Project #3:

Opening Section/Introduction

o   Introduce who I am

o   Upbeat Music (grab attention)

o   Title of video (grab attention)

o   Brief summary: A very brief recap of information regarding why the captivity of orcas or killer whales is unethical, and why it has caught the public's attention. 

§  Main Idea: Explain the proposed solution made by the California Coastal Commission regarding the breeding of orcas in captivity. 

• Evidence: An in-depth analysis of the new law. Include or reference quotes from the actual legal document.

Proves/Importance- Providing an explanation of the solution or the new law is fundamental to helping the audience understand the issue, problem, and solution. 

• Evidence: Analyze the rhetorical strategies implemented by each of the stakeholders. The stakeholders are SeaWorld, PETA, and the public (after Blackfish). 

Proves/Importance- Understanding the rhetorical strategies that the stakeholders used helps the audience understand how the law was finally passed.

§  Main Idea: Explain the ways in which this new California law affects SeaWorld and what this means for the future of SeaWorld.

·      Evidence: The orcas that are in captivity aren't allowed to be set free, however, they will be the last generation of captive orcas.

Proves/Importance: That positive change has been made. This is more of a "where we go from here" stage.

·      Evidence: Include interviews (both expert and non-expert) regarding the new law. 

Proves/Importance: Hearing other people's opinions regarding the subject helps to build an understanding of the topic altogether. 

§  Main Idea: Explore or discuss whether or not banning the breeding of orcas is truly the 'best' solution or if there are better ones.

·      Evidence: Explain the effects that captivity has on orcas, and explain why prohibiting the breeding of orcas in captivity is the right solution.

Proves/Importance: Helps to secure faith in the solution that has been concocted.  

·      Evidence: Analyze the rhetorical strategies such as credibility, logic, and emotion.

·      Proves/Importance: Creates a better understanding of the piece as a whole by figuring out the rhetorical strategies that were used to convey the overall purpose/message.

·      Closing

o   Bring each of the body paragraphs together in a single coherent summary. Discuss the importance of understanding the writing process in the pharmaceutical field, and mention any information that I found interesting or daunting.

Larger Significance?

To explain the larger significance of the subject matter I will (1) discuss the solution that has been created, and (2) explain the reasons why it is the best solution for right now.

The issue with SeaWorld has been raging on in the media since the dawn of Blackfish, however, it wasn't until the Spring of 2016 was a solution finally created. The purpose of this project is to explain why prohibiting the breeding of orcas is the best solution right now.